Blk 123 ABC
#20-123
Singapore 123456
nettetay@gmail.com
1st September 2010
Regional Sales Center of
Electronics Component Manufacturer
Ayer Rajah Industrial Estate
To Whom It May Concern:
This letter is to express my interest to work as a Sales Executive in your company, as advertised in the Straits Time, Recruit section on 1st September 2010. I am a fresh graduate from National University of Singapore with a Bachelor Degree in Science (Physics). I would like to begin my career as a Sales Executive in your company.
Working as a Sales Executive in an Electronics Component Manufacturing company, it would be fulfilling and challenging. It will provide many opportunities to work with various customers while applying the skill of communication. Moreover, being a physicist, it will be interesting and challenging to make use of my theoretical knowledge onto the sales of Electronics Component. It will allow a different perspective in promoting of the products. You will note that from my enclosed resume, many of my working experiences and positions in my extracurricular demostrate good interpersonal skill and great learning ability. This is evident in my role as the head of my class committee, who has a good reputation among my peers and teachers. Moreover, it reflects an independent worker who is capable to work efficiently and sets high expectations for herself. I am confident that I am able to excel as a Sales Executive in your organization and carry out my responsibilites with great pleasure.
A letter and a resume can tell you only so much about my motivation and qualifications. I will contact you in the next few days to see if you require any additional information and arrange an interview to share more about myself.
Thank you for your consideration.
Yours Sincerely,
Lynette Tay Wan Qing
Enclosure:Resume
Hello!
ReplyDeleteI thought that the letter is pretty well written as it sounded pretty confident and you are willing to take on the job anytime they hire you.
I just thought that it will be good if you are able to find out the name of the HR manager. However, it seems that from the advertisement, it is unlikely that you are able to find out the identity of the one in charge. In any case, I thought that it may be more appropriate to use "Dear Sir/Madam" instead of "To Whom it May Concern" as it feels more personal that way. Furthermore, I was reading a book the other day and it says that phrases like such are pretty much "old-fashioned" and we probably should use as little of it as possible in our letter.
Just my two cents worth of thoughts.
Thanks DY!!! I will definitely remember to edit that :)
ReplyDeleteHey Lynette,
ReplyDeleteGreat work! you market yourself in the employer's shoes.
Dayang mentioned a great point on "to whom it may concern". So I will share with you my humble opinion. It is great to begin the 2nd para with your interest of this post and your research of that company. I just feel that they are a bit long. you can grab the employer's attention better if you state your quality earlier.
Great work!
Thanks Hu Xuan, I will take note of it :)
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